文中单词拼写做的不错,另外再增加词汇量积累就更好了;注意句式在文中的变化,加强一些从句的使用,文章会更棒;上下文衔接欠佳,文章层次欠清晰,建议加强连接词和衔接词的积累。
Sam got up at 6 o'clock yesterday,then he ride a bycicle to the park and have a geat time.He had have lunch with his parents at McDonald's at noon.In the afternoon,he went to play basketball with his classmates from 4 to 6 o'clock.He really happy.After supper,sam went for a walk with his father,and his father bought him a CD.what a funny day he passed.