小学二年级英语作文:A Trip

语句间的衔接成分用的不错，同时文章中的过程性词汇很丰富；拼写很棒，可适当增加高级词汇的使用；可适当增加复合句和从句的使用。

There are an old saying,the mountains and waters in Guilin are the finest under heaven.Now I have a trip just right to see the beautiful scenery,it can be briefly summed up as follows. To beginning with,,when my foot stepped into there, my heart has been surprised the magnificent mountains that let me marvelled at the magical scene.What's more,the water is also great that it not only can drink randomly but also which are clear.As far as I'm concerned,the Guilin is exceedingly wonderful,and I love my trip.