单词拼写做的很好,请注意积累词汇量;注意句式在文中的变化,加强一些从句的使用,文章会更棒;过渡词和衔接词使用不恰当,缺少组织,可适当增加连接词的使用。
Sam got up at six o' clock yesterday. then he ride his bike to the park, he was interesting at the park. he has the lunch in the McDonald's with his parents. afternoon Sam and his classmates played the basketball at school, from four o' clock to six o' clock. how a interesting day Sam has!