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Sam got up at 6 o'clock yesterday. Then he went to park used bicycle,he played happy.He and his parent's have lunch in McDonald's.Sam and his friend played basketball this afternoon,begin at 4 o'clock to 6 o'clock.After dinner,Sam and his father go for a walk.His father given he a music CD.How beautiful and fun day is Sam have.