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A Fun day Sam had a great day yesterday. He got up at six o'clock in the morning yesterday.Then rode to the park and enjoyed himself. At noon,He had lunch with parents in McDonald's.In the afternoon,He went to play basketball with classmates in the school.They never stopped till six o'clock.Then went home and had supper.After supper,He went for a walk with his father and his father bought a classical music CD for him. How fun the day he had!