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Hello,my name is Lucy King, I am 13 years old and from Uk.my hobbies are sports ,music and movies. I like china very much and want to know more about china. so I want to look for a pen pal who is a girl ,and if she has the same hobbies with me,which is better. I hope to learn chinese from her, and in reture, I can teach her english ,we can help each other . yours Lucy King