小学三年级英语作文:When I grow up

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When i grow up , i want to be a successful business people. and than i can ear lots of money , i will have a better life with my mother and my father. beause we are very poor now, and my parent always work hard day and night for money , so my father's body is not heath ,he have to see the doctor and had spent more money ,and my mother got big pressure. so i have to study hardly and become a business man for future.