但从句使用不熟练,注意平时练习中多积累;作者使用词汇表达不都灵魂,需要多使用一些高级词汇;层次不清晰,几乎没有使用衔接词。
My favorite friend is Sam.Sam got up at six o’clock yesterday morning. After that, he rode his bike to the park. He had great fun playing in the park. At noon, he had lunch in McDonald’s with his parents. In the afternoon, Sam played basketball from four to six with his classmates. It was relaxing. After dinner, Sam went for a walk with his father. His father bought a classical CD for him. He was very happy because he enjoys music very much. All in all,He has an intereted day.