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作者词汇表达丰富度要继续提升，高级词汇使用过少；若加强一些复杂句和从句的使用，文章会更棒；层次不清晰，几乎没有使用衔接词。
My favorite friend is Sam.He got up at six o’clock yesterday morning. After that, he rode his bike to the park. He had great fun playing in the park. At noon, he had lunch in McDonald’s with his parents. In the afternoon, Sam played basketball from four to six with his pupil .It was relaxing. After dinner, Sam went for a walk with his father. His father bought a classical CD for him. He was very happy because he enjoys music very much. All in all,he has an very interesting day.
