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My favorite sport is playing football. Why do i love football? Because of the little thing that happened at my childhood. One day, i by chance got a football on my way home from school . Then i played football with my little friends. From that on, i found that i had loved the sport game deeply. Day by day, i trained it ,and even made a competetions with my friends. Of cause, my dream is to be a professional football player like the sport star, belk.harm.