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Sam get up at six o'clock yesterday, then he rided the bicycle to the park. He had fun in the park. He had lunch with his parents in MAC at noon. He played basketball with his classmates from four to six. After supper, sam went for a walk with his father and his father send him a classical CD. How fun it is . Sam had a nice day.