文中词汇表达多样性不足,在高级词汇方面尤其要多积累;若加强一些复杂句和从句的使用,文章会更棒;没有能够有效地使用连接词和过渡词。
Sam got up at six o'clock yesterday. Then he rode his bike to the park and he had a great time there. At noon, he and his parents had their lunch in the McDonald's. In the afternoon, Sam and his classmates played basketball from 4pm. till 6 pm. at the school. After dinner, Sam and his father went for a walk, and his father bought him a CD about classical music. It's such an interesting day that Sam enjoyed!