语句间的衔接成分用的不错,同时文章中的过程性词汇很丰富;丰富的使用了长难句;文中词汇表达较为丰富准确,但存在单词拼写错误。
Sam got up at six o'clock yestearday,then he's parents told sam that we goes to park after dinner ,sam very happy,for a moment, Sam and his parents arrived the park door and into,The park is so big and very beautiful,There is a river around the park, some children plays on the beach,and another people are boating ,sam take many ptcture, finaly they take photo of the family and goes out ,sam have a good trip ,in the afternoon , sam and parents ate ckicken in the McDonald’s,after the meal,sam's parents first go home ,and sam play basketball with classmats in the school ,at pm4 till pm 6,then sam goes home ,after dinner ,sam and his father go for a walk in the street,when they walk to shop,his father into the shop to buy a classical music for him, sam happy like chlidren