文中词汇表达稍欠丰富,但单词拼写做的很棒;句式变化不明显,另外要多多加强从句在文中的比例;层次不清晰,几乎没有使用衔接词。
what an interesting day Sam got up at six o'clock yesterday.he rode bicycle in the park,he played very happy. his father and he had a lunch in Mcdonald's .Sam played basketball with his classmate from four a.m to six a.m at school.After lunch,Sam and his father went for a walk,his father bought a classical CD. what an interesting day Sam is.