文中单词拼写做的不错,另外再增加词汇量积累就更好了;从句使用量太少;过渡词和衔接词使用不恰当,缺少组织,可适当增加连接词的使用。
Sam is a good boy. Sam got up at 6 o'clock yesterday. Then he ride bike to park. He is very happy in park.In lunch ,he ate lunch with father and mother in McDonald's. Then Sam and his classmate played basketball in school. From 4 p.m to 6p.m. Ate dinner after,Sam and his father go for a walk, his father buyed a old music CD for Sam.SO, Sam have a good day .