作者词汇表达较为熟练,学术词汇使用不是很多;句法知识很棒,若增加一些从句的使用,文章会更出色;层次不清晰,几乎没有使用衔接词。
This semester, we have a new teacher for our English lessons. Who is she? She is Mrs.Li. She is a young lady who comes from England. She is very tall and slim.She is extremely pretty,because she has two big eyes, red mouth, and golden hairs. In the class, she taught us about oral English and many writing skills. At the end of this term, all of our grade has been improved, It is a good new! So far as I know, She is both intelligent and kind, she reads a good deal, everyone likes her very much. She always helped us as far as she can. She helped us after class frequently. Once a day, I had a hard cold at that morning, I called Mrs.Li for a day off. She allowed immediately, and went to hospital to see me after class. I felt so moving on that day. In a word, she is a good teacher in our minds. So we all looking forward to the new semester coming soon.