文中单词拼写做的很棒,再多积累些词汇就更好了;句法知识不错,多多加强复杂句的练习;层次不清晰,几乎没有使用衔接词。
Sam got up at 6 o'clock yesterday morning.then he goes to park by bike. he is very happy. At noon,he and he's parents had lunch in the McDonald's At afternoon,sam and he's friends play basketball in the school from 16:00 p.m. till 18:00 p.m. Sam go for a walk with he's father after had dinner.he's father bought a classical music for him. what a nice day!