若加强一些复杂句和从句的使用,文章会更棒;作者词汇量偏少,不过单词拼写方面做的不错;层次不清晰,几乎没有使用衔接词。
Sam got up at 6 o'clock yesterday morning.then he goes to the park by bike. He is very happy. At noon,he and his parents had lunch in the McDonald's In the afternoon,sam and his friends play basketball in the school from 16:00 p.m. till 18:00 p.m. Sam goes for a walk with his father after had dinner.he's father bought a classical music for him. What a nice day!