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Sam got up ai six o'clock yeasterday morning.Then he rode bike to the park,he played very happy.In the noon,he ate McDonald's with his parents.In the afteroom,he played basketball with his classmates in school,he play it since four o'clock till six o'clock.After dinner,Sam and his father went for a walk,his father bought a CD to him.What happy the day of Sam