作者词汇量偏少,但单词拼写做的不错;文中从句数量过少;上下文衔接欠佳,文章层次欠清晰,建议加强连接词和衔接词的积累。
Sam got up at 6 a.m. yesterday. He ride to the park and played happily. At noon, Sam and his parents had lunch in McDonald's. Then Sam and his schoolmates played basketball in school from 4 p.m. till 6 p.m. After dinner, Sam and his father went for a walk, his father bought him a CD of classic music. What a funny day Sam have had.