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Yesterday, Sam got up at 6 a.m., then he rode to the park and had a lot of fun. At noon, Sam had his lunch in McDonald's with his parents. At 4 p.m., Sam went to school to play basketball with his classmates till 6 p.m. After dinner, Sam and his father went for a walk. On the way home, his father bought him a CD of classic music. What a funny day Sam has had.