很好的运用了从句,但部分句子稍有瑕疵;采用了简单的衔接手法,行文流畅;文中词汇表达稍欠丰富,请增加词汇量的积累。
Sam got up at six o'clock yesterday,than he rode a bike to the park,he was happy on the park,in the afertnoon,he and his parents had dinner in the McDonald's,and than he was in the school played basketball with his classmates in the afternoon, they played until six o'clock pm.after the dinner ,Sam and his father got for a walk,his father bought a classical music CD to him,this day was a Sam funny day ,he is very happy.