单词拼写做的不错,文中词汇表达贫乏;很好的运用了从句,但部分句子稍有瑕疵;采用了简单的衔接手法,行文流畅。
Sam got up at six o'clock yesterday,than he rode a bike to the park,he was happy on the park,in the afternoon,he and his parents had dinner in the McDonald's,and than he was in the school played basketball with his classmates in the afternoon, they played until six o'clock pm.after the dinner ,Sam and his father got for a walk,his father bought a classical music CD to him,this day was a Sam funny day ,he is very happy.