能够很好的使用长难句且句法很棒;文中用词稍显贫乏;文章结构不够严谨,应增加过程性词汇的使用。
Sam got up at six o'clock yesterday,than he rode his bike to the park,he had happy playing in the park,in the afternoon,he and his parents had dinner in the McDonald' ,and than he played basketball from four to six with his classmates in the afternoon it was relaxing.After dinner,Sam Went for a walk with his father.His father bought a classical music CD for him.His was very happy because he enjoys music very much what a happy day Sam had.