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Sam got up at six clock yesterday . And then he gent to park by bike, he played very happy in the park . he had lunch with his parents in McDonald's . In the afterning sam played basketball with his classmates in the school ,from PM 4:00 till PM 6:00.After having dinner ,sam went for a walk with his father ,his fater bought a classic muisc CD for him. This was a funny day for sam !!