小学一年级英语作文:Jim's family

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Look at the picture on that desk, it depicts Jim's whole family. They are Jim's grandma，grandpa,his parents, and his sister.His grandma and grandpa are all teachers at there local senior high school. And his father is an administrator in a huge company, while his mother is one doctor. And his sister is a student in high school now.