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Sam get up six clock in yesterday .secod,he piay the bike to park. he very fun .At noon, he had lunch in McDonald’s with his parents. In the afternoon, Sam played basketball from four to six with his classmates. It was relaxing. After dinner, Sam went for a walk with his father. His father bought a classical CD for him. He was very happy because he enjoys music very much. What a happy day Sam had!