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Hello, my name is Lucy king. I love china years ago, and I want to learn more things about china. I am from the Uk, my mother language is English, I have many hobbies, but my favorite is sports,music,movies. So, I want to meet a girl who have the same hobbies with me. I hope to learn Chinese from her, and she can learn English from me. We can learn each other. My pen friend, I wait you.