正确句子比例很高,但需多多加强从句的使用;希望作者可以加强词汇表达多样性,尤其是高级词汇的积累;层次不清晰,几乎没有使用衔接词。
Sam got up at six o'clock yesterday.It was sunny tomorrow,so after that,he road a bike to the park.He had a great fun playing with his friends.At noon,he had lunch with his parents in McDonald's.It was a tasty lunch.In the afternoon,Sam played basketball with his classmates at school form then four o'clock still six o'clcok.After dinner,Sam went for a walk with his dad.His dad bought a CD for him.He is very happy.What a interesting day Sam had!