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Everyone has a favourite sport, mine is football. I felt in love with football totally by chance. when I was a boy, my friends and I found a deserted football by the side of the road after school, so we start to play with the ball while walking back home. and we started to play together, train together and match with other teams. Football have brought me a lot of fun. my favourite football star is Divid Backerham from Britain, and my dream is to become a professional football player in the future.