文中词汇表达比较多样,能多用高级词汇就更好了;作者句法知识很棒,适当增加从句的使用,会取得更不错的成绩;文章采用了适当的过渡词和衔接词,结构比较严谨。
For this year,there been some campus force which have made people surprised.At the same time,we all have a deep thought:what should we do to improve school safety?Some experts said that we should improve the security guard and student's realise of safety first.Then,we must control and forbid to fight among students.It is a good idea to reduce the campus force.Last but not least,it is also helpful to educate the students and make their mind healthy.