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Yesterday Sam got up at six o'clock.Then he rode the bike to the park.He had a great time in the park.In the noon,he had the lunch with his parents in the Mcdonald's.In the afternoon,Sam played basketball with his friends in the school,they played from four p.m to six p.m.After the supper,Sam went for a walk with his father.His father bought a classical music CD for him. What a interesting day Sam had!