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I have a good friend who have a long straight black hair.She is very nice and friendly.We are always get along with well.When I get into trouble,she will try her best to help me.Sometimes she has snacks,she will share with me.We are look like a sister.Because we ofen play with each other.I am very silly but she will not laugh at me.I really treasure her who is my ture friend.I think I worth to trea her with heart.I love her.