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Yesterday was Sam's happy day! He got up at 6:00.after he finished his breakfast went to park by his bicycle,at the park he met his friends they were talked about football match, they talked about themselves favourite star.Until lunch time sam and his parent's went to MsDonald's have eat lunch McDonald's was Sam's favourite restaurant. At the afternoon ,Sam went to his school play together with his classmate,they played basketball,they were all happyied! two hours after sam go home. after dinner he and his father went for a walk,his father bought a classic CD sent to his. What an interesting day!