句法知识很棒,若增加一些从句的使用,文章会更出色;作者能较灵活地使用词汇表达,但要多积累高级词汇;文章层次不够分明,缺少组织,需注意文章整体的组织结构。
What a busy day I had yesterday! In the mornining,I got up under the sunshine and I felt comfortable.After that,I had milk and bread for breakfast,and then my friend invited me to go camping in the park.We played games both of us like and took lots of pictures.We also climbed the mountains and swam in the river.It was very interesting for us to cook lunch by ourselves,so we enjoyed our meals very much.We really had a good time.