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Sarm got up at 6 o'clock yesterday,and he went to the park by bike and play very well.He and his perents had lunch in the McDonald's at noon.He and his classmates played basketball in the afternoon from 4pm to 6pm.After dinner,Sam and his father went for a walk and his father got a calssical CD for him.How funny a day Sam have!