上下文衔接欠佳,文章层次欠清晰,建议加强连接词和衔接词的积累;多多加强从句和复杂句的使用;文中用词稍显贫乏,文中存在一些拼写错误。
san got up at six clock yesterday.then go to park by bick,he very happy in the park.he with parents haven lunch in the afternoon.san paly basketball with friends in school.from four still six.after denind,,sam and his father go for a walk.his father by a music CD with sam.have good day with sam