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My favorite sport My favorite sport is football, however it is a accidental chance that made football be my favorite sport. I pick up a football on my way home, then I play the football with my friends. From now on, I love the football deeply. I often practice and compitite with my classmates. My favorite football superstar is Beckham and my greatest wish is that become a professional football player.