可适当增加从句的使用,注意文中的一些小错误;可适当增加连接词和衔接词的使用;请作者增加词汇表达的丰富度,对拼写检查也要重视。
My favorite sport is playing football, by chance, I love to play football. I pick up a football on my way home, then I play the football with my friends. From now on, I love the football deeply. I often practice and compitite with my classmates. My favorite football superstar is Beckham and my greatest wish is that become a professional football player.