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Yesterday Sam got up on six clock and went to park by bike. He had a very good time in the park. He and his parents had a lunch at McDonald's. In the afternoon Sam and his classmates played basketball from four clock till six clock. After super Sam went for a walk with his father. and his father bought a classical CD for him. Sam had a lots of fun in this day.