文中词汇表达多样性不足,在高级词汇方面尤其要多积累;不能熟练使用过渡词,文章结构欠佳;可适当增加复杂句和从句的使用。
Tom is a very disciplined person. Everyday he get up at six o'clock. After that he go to school by bus at 6:15 am. He never eat outside. because he think foods aren't clean outside. He is dedicate to study. So he never listen to music and watch TV on school days. What's more,He require himself back home by 12:00 in the morning and by 9:20 in the evening.