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I like sports ,swimming,jogging,climbing or playing badminton...,but football is my favorite sport.I like football by chance that I picked up a football on my way home once and then I played it with my friends.Since then I fell deeply in love with football.Football brings me a lot of happiness,it makes me forget some annoyances in life,so I often train and match with my classmates.My favorite football star is Beckham who comes from the British.Now my greatest wish is to become a professional football player and I will fight for it.I wish I could stand on the football field of olympic games and represent our country to match.This is my dream,I know it is hard ,but I will try my best.