文中单词拼写做的不错,另外再增加词汇量积累就更好了;可适当增加从句的使用,注意文中的一些小错误;结构不严谨,几乎没有使用衔接词,上下文衔接欠流畅。
Sam got up at six o'clock yesterday. then he went bike in the garden, at there he had a good time .he and his parents ate their lunck at Mc Donald's. in the afternoon Sam and his friends played basketball in the school from four o'clock till six o'clock.after the dinner ,Sam and his father went for walk together, his father bought a CD card for him。what a fine day