作者词汇量偏少,但单词拼写做的不错;句式变化不明显,另外要多多加强从句在文中的比例;上下文衔接手法不熟练,没有能够有效的使用衔接词;
Sam got up at six o'clock yesterday,then he went to the park by bike,and he had a really good time.He had his lunch in McDonald with his parents.In the afternoon,Sam played basketball in the school with his classmates from 4p.m till 6p.m.After dinner,Sam went for a walk with his father who bought a classic music CD.What a interesting day!