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Yestersday Sam got up at six.Then he got to the park by bike.He was fan.At noon ,Sam ate lunch at McDonald's whit his father.In the afternoon。He palyed basketball at school whit his firendlys.Form four in the afternoon to six.After dinner,Sam went for a walk whit his dad.His father bought a CD for him.Today Sam was happy.