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Sam got up at six yesterday.then he gone to park rided a bike and very happy.The parents and he had lunch at the McDonald's. Sam played basketball with his glassmate at the four o'clock till six o'clock.After the dinner,Sam and his father gone for a walk,father buyed one classical music CD。what a wonderfull day Sam had.