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When I knew that you will visit China with your parents from your letter,I was so delighted that I felt flowers bloomed in my heart.Since you want to have the mid-autumn festival during the visit,I'd like to introduce it for you. The Mid-Autumn Festival is one of the traditional festivals in China which is as important as Spring festival.Since 200 thousands years ago,the Chinese have celebrated the festival on lunar August 15th.On the festival all the family member will have a rich supper together.Moon cake is typical food on mid-autumn festival. The family eat it enjoyable while they talk in the moonlight.So in Chinese'eyes, Mid-Autumn is another word for reunion. I hope that you will have a unforgettable time in China.