注意句式在文中的变化,加强一些从句的使用,文章会更棒;作者词汇量较小,单词拼写也要注意;不能熟练使用过渡词,文章结构不严谨;
sam got up at six o'clock yesterday . Then he by cycle to parck , He had very fun on the parck . He and his parents had lunch at McDonald's in the noon. Afternoon Sam and his classmates played the basketball in the scholl , from four to six p.m. . After dinner , Sam and his father went for a walk , his father baught a piece of classical music CD . What a fun day Sam had !