文中从句数量过少;文章用词过于单一,还要加强拼写检查;不能熟练使用过渡词,文章结构不严谨;
Sam got up at six o'clock yesterday. Then he went to the park by cycle , he had very fun on the park. He and his parents had lunch at McDonald's in the noon. In the afternoon Sam and his classmates played the basketball in the scholl, from four to six p.m.. After dinner, Sam and his father went for a walk, his father baught a piece of classical music CD. What a fun day Sam had!