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Sam got up at six o'clock yesterday. Then he went to the park by cycle, he had very fun on the park. He and his parents had lunch at McDonald's in the noon. In the afternoon Sam and his classmates played the basketball in the school, from four to six p.m.. After dinner, Sam and his father went for a walk, his father baught a piece of classical music CD. What a fun day Sam had!